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i wont break even
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she dropped her love along the streets,
poured her heart into a drain.
hung her feelings out to dry
[and left them there
no second thoughts]
she sold her soul to the open road
and wouldn't you know
she'd still give more
[but you'd never guess that
would you ?]
poured her heart into a drain.
hung her feelings out to dry
[and left them there
no second thoughts]
she sold her soul to the open road
and wouldn't you know
she'd still give more
[but you'd never guess that
would you ?]
my own heart, out for people to see.
thank you for reading this. it means a lot
title kinda stole from the song
break even- the script
thank you for reading this. it means a lot
title kinda stole from the song
break even- the script
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I must say that the imagery you've incorporated makes this piece more profound overall...
It's a bit rough where the flow is concerned, but I guess that could reflect the concept and the atmosphere of things. I like how the brevity could suggest that it's done and dusted now... makes it sadder, almost. =/
Great use of the brackets and it's effective how you've raised a question at the end.
It's a bit rough where the flow is concerned, but I guess that could reflect the concept and the atmosphere of things. I like how the brevity could suggest that it's done and dusted now... makes it sadder, almost. =/
Great use of the brackets and it's effective how you've raised a question at the end.